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When i tried writing about hangovers

Hangover overdrive
The steering wheel
Crashing junkies
In corners of my alcohol
And nicotine rusted mind

Flashing razorblade smiles
Beautiful killer vibes
Beating to the flash
Im stuck in crossroads
Of Hotel California imagery

Perfume of the night
the eau naturale scent
Of girls' sweat swinging
with the putrid puke
praying to the porcelain god

And i lie there a
Beaten rabid dog on
Railroad tracks
Flecks of rabies foam
on the corners of my mouth

Im a prisoner to freedom
on a blind vendetta to stardom
writing poems to the sound
gutters cats' songs

I can't remember the lyrics
we sang raving mad last night

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On Sunday February 10th, 2008, the-rapist (372) writes:

I'm glad you're still here.

On Tuesday October 31st, 2006, Instant Insanity (745) writes:

Who would have thaught to write a poem about a hangover. "I had the greatest time of my life last night!!!!! What happened? I dont remember :-(." ][ ][

On Friday October 27th, 2006, NeroMatches (51) writes:

fucking shit man. that last line! *faves*

On Wednesday October 25th, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1056) writes:

Tetch somehow you just seem to know. You really amaze me with how honest and freeing your works are. Who else could write of girls sweating and it still sound beautiful? *Bravo* Julia~

On Tuesday October 24th, 2006, Aunty Depressant (687) writes:

Wooohoooo, sorry, I'll try to keep it down--even if you can't hehehe. So glad I'm boring these days! Hangovers, in the corner of my mind, misty...why do wasted people always go to hobo rails?

On Tuesday October 24th, 2006, hate_doll (328) writes:

I like it a lot, but I think it would be better if you did away with a few of the cliches like "praying to the porcelain god" and "razorblade smiles" because I think your mind could come up with something much better, like

On Tuesday October 24th, 2006, hate_doll (328) writes:

"nicotine rusted mind" that's great. And the alliterations that aren't simultaneous really help with the flow..overall I think this is wonderful

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